for Faded Angel12/11/2003 c1 
7Flamehail
Well, I like the title, anyway. ^_^
Typos:
**"different though." = "different, though."
**"stop me, it worked." = "stop me; it worked."
**"but none such miracle" = "but no such miracle"
All of this sad and melancholy musing! And yet it's too beautiful to be depressing. You have a gift for writing short things; something I totally and completely lack. I can't even keep 40-minute in-class essays under 500 words, much less my stories!
Very well done.
Flamehail
7FlamehailWell, I like the title, anyway. ^_^
Typos:
**"different though." = "different, though."
**"stop me, it worked." = "stop me; it worked."
**"but none such miracle" = "but no such miracle"
All of this sad and melancholy musing! And yet it's too beautiful to be depressing. You have a gift for writing short things; something I totally and completely lack. I can't even keep 40-minute in-class essays under 500 words, much less my stories!
Very well done.
Flamehail
12/10/2003 c1 2Rudolph Schmidt
That was very well done, your language was very vivid in describing her. I especially love the very last lines. I enjoyed it. (ps. thanks for your constant reviews, they're much appreciated.)
2Rudolph SchmidtThat was very well done, your language was very vivid in describing her. I especially love the very last lines. I enjoyed it. (ps. thanks for your constant reviews, they're much appreciated.)
5/20/2003 c1 18Val Mora
Very lovely. ^_^ Very sad, heartfelt, and gorgeous. You obviously put a lot of thought into this.
I thought the ending was fascinating, and the change in the narrator's thoughts on the sunrise. Somewhat vampiric, but more just a twisted perception. ^_^
The only difficulty with this was that there were a couple of places where you used commas, instead of semicolons - it's very distracting, at least to me, when one is replaced with the other incorrectly, so I ask that you fix that. Other than that, this was lovely.
I'd also like to thank you for your reviews for VDD (Vampire of Dark Destruction), Moons, and Stone-Speaker.
18Val MoraVery lovely. ^_^ Very sad, heartfelt, and gorgeous. You obviously put a lot of thought into this.
I thought the ending was fascinating, and the change in the narrator's thoughts on the sunrise. Somewhat vampiric, but more just a twisted perception. ^_^
The only difficulty with this was that there were a couple of places where you used commas, instead of semicolons - it's very distracting, at least to me, when one is replaced with the other incorrectly, so I ask that you fix that. Other than that, this was lovely.
I'd also like to thank you for your reviews for VDD (Vampire of Dark Destruction), Moons, and Stone-Speaker.
5/5/2003 c1 54Werecat99
Loved the opening paragraph. The picture was just stunning. And so sad, at the same time...
I've always felt a strange relation with death and everything around it. And this is one of the best works I've read on the subject; honest, tender and still close to reality.
PS
Thanks for the reviews. Especially for "Brother Sun, Sister Moon".
54Werecat99Loved the opening paragraph. The picture was just stunning. And so sad, at the same time...
I've always felt a strange relation with death and everything around it. And this is one of the best works I've read on the subject; honest, tender and still close to reality.
PS
Thanks for the reviews. Especially for "Brother Sun, Sister Moon".
2/20/2003 c1 6Strider Hunter
Good work as always, Dee. Heartfelt and sad, with a hint of understandable bitterness towards the end. Can't really say anything more about this one.angst stories are pretty much self-explanatory for me.
6Strider HunterGood work as always, Dee. Heartfelt and sad, with a hint of understandable bitterness towards the end. Can't really say anything more about this one.angst stories are pretty much self-explanatory for me.
8/2/2002 c1 I'mnolongerhereatthisaccount
Aaaww that is so sad and touching.
Nice writting.
Could you maybe read and review my origonal vampire novel?
I would really apricate it.As I am to trying to make my own writting craft better.Thanks if you can and sweet sad story.
Aaaww that is so sad and touching.
Nice writting.
Could you maybe read and review my origonal vampire novel?
I would really apricate it.As I am to trying to make my own writting craft better.Thanks if you can and sweet sad story.
5/1/2002 c1 Shoshie
Great story, DE. It was nice and succinct. The description was particularly wonderful. The only thing lacking (anything can be changed for the better, no?) was perhaps more about the speaker's reaction before the girl died, how she looked, how it felt. Other than that, you did an awsome job!
Great story, DE. It was nice and succinct. The description was particularly wonderful. The only thing lacking (anything can be changed for the better, no?) was perhaps more about the speaker's reaction before the girl died, how she looked, how it felt. Other than that, you did an awsome job!
4/22/2002 c1 5adulaith
You write extremely well and use words in a way that's hard for some people to get out. This was a great piece and written with such emotion I nearly cried myself. I hope I could find that sort of love someday, and I hope you continue you writing and using that same passion to fuel your words.
5adulaithYou write extremely well and use words in a way that's hard for some people to get out. This was a great piece and written with such emotion I nearly cried myself. I hope I could find that sort of love someday, and I hope you continue you writing and using that same passion to fuel your words.