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3/31/2012 c11 3foreigndelight
Wow.. that was really bad.

Rape, marriage, love.. these are hard, complicated and weighty matter, and it shouldn't be written as if its very easy to handle.

I am sorry because it started very well, ended terrible.
11/28/2007 c11 xxily4everxx
AWW! wat a sweet story! i luv josh! i h8 dat Brad in dat story...but anyways...wat a gr8 story ^^
7/25/2007 c11 1Mayleena
excellent story! very very very good! loved it lots!
10/11/2006 c11 xo-pauli-ox
short n sweet =) kute
10/24/2005 c11 clora
this is so bad i don't know where to begin. where are the layers to you're characters, where is the love and hate between them? all of this was completely stupid and told appalingly.no detail, no subtlety. terrible.
5/5/2005 c11 rachel
i just finished reading your story and i have to be honest, it has the makings of a very good story, a decent plot and the characters have history and therefore good chemistry. But thats as far as it went from there, big sensitive issues were treated somewhat lightly, and that can get very tricky with the audience. you could have added so much depth to it to the issues through how the characters respond, marriage, pregnancy, rape... you might want to focus more on one thing. covering them all in a few chapters seems idealic and makes it seem less important. well thats just my input, its of course your story, so good luck! best, rachel
2/25/2005 c11 SmartassHampster
LUVD IT! GREAT! AWW! !Made me sad and happy!
1/23/2005 c11 3Pseudo-6
That was really good. Just the right pace and i like how you changed the POVs. Good job.
6/27/2004 c11 Haz Almighty
thats really gd, it kept me reading cos i wanted to know what happened. keep writing
Haz almighty
6/7/2004 c11 bu8bbleslrv5
all you stories are good but i thimk this onez the best. you should amke there honny moon be like in rome an then make her be preget again.
4/30/2004 c11 sweetie
its sweet :) thanks for writing~
9/5/2003 c11 5Thrifty Sara
Dude, that was a good story. Bravo! Another good story from ya. I was kinda chuckiling how you had everyone continue to make out. HA HA! Wait, no HA HA! She got raped... That was so sad. Very overwhelming indeed. It made me cringe. Dude, I wouldn't have dated Brad. 'Der, my mom's in the kitchen so we can't have fun' I wanted to deck him but Josh took care of it. It was sad how she got pregnant. I would have put the baby up for adoption. Thats just me though...
8/18/2003 c11 6Lady Gerbil
i just wanted to leave another note to let you know i read the whole thing,cuz the last one seemed like i stopped on the first chapter
8/18/2003 c1 Lady Gerbil
lmao @ slapping him again.i liked it...good stuff.realistic
8/15/2003 c11 7TakenDeath
Good story...yep yep. I read this one book book that's called Speak, and another called Boys Lie, both of them about girls getting raped. They were great books, have you ever read them?
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