for The Starbird Hunt6/29/2004 c11 loveydovey
i love yoh
i love yoh
1/3/2003 c6 
23Lornyl Mahtsae
Man, phil. What 14 year-old doesn't love sitting on their ass in front of the comp! lol. Boy, those space 'coons really get nasty! glad we don't have any. that old dude is weird. For a miute i thought he'd go dowm with his ship and almost take the rest of the six w/him! that would've sukked. This is a great story. :) ((SOO much better than mine, which I have been contemplating about starting fresh on. You know fix things.)) I do this too often, but i was thinking about starting another story before I finish the rest. based on a long and detailed dream I had once. I had another one last night that had th aliens from the "Alien" movies in it. It was neat. Keep on writing!
23Lornyl MahtsaeMan, phil. What 14 year-old doesn't love sitting on their ass in front of the comp! lol. Boy, those space 'coons really get nasty! glad we don't have any. that old dude is weird. For a miute i thought he'd go dowm with his ship and almost take the rest of the six w/him! that would've sukked. This is a great story. :) ((SOO much better than mine, which I have been contemplating about starting fresh on. You know fix things.)) I do this too often, but i was thinking about starting another story before I finish the rest. based on a long and detailed dream I had once. I had another one last night that had th aliens from the "Alien" movies in it. It was neat. Keep on writing!
8/22/2002 c5 Lornyl Mahtsae
SPACE 'COONS! dun dun duuuuuuuuuuunnn!
haha, that's funny. I laughed, I cried, I ate food! haha, that's oak-ayyy!
SPACE 'COONS! dun dun duuuuuuuuuuunnn!
haha, that's funny. I laughed, I cried, I ate food! haha, that's oak-ayyy!
8/22/2002 c3 Lornyl Mahtsae
haha, Yak Waffles... more like 'yuk Waffles. :) Thanx for reviewing more of Zargon and Katelyn. I understand what you're saying... and I thank you ALOT! you know, you don't catch these things when you yourself are going over your own things. I really appreciate it. Hey, do you think I should re-write the chapters? because you made a very important point there in your review, and you're right. I already though of few places where I'd be able to ake tha chapters longer. make the story go a bit slower comparatively. Any way, I just want you to know how much I appreciate you giving me advice! :)
Lov, Lornie
haha, Yak Waffles... more like 'yuk Waffles. :) Thanx for reviewing more of Zargon and Katelyn. I understand what you're saying... and I thank you ALOT! you know, you don't catch these things when you yourself are going over your own things. I really appreciate it. Hey, do you think I should re-write the chapters? because you made a very important point there in your review, and you're right. I already though of few places where I'd be able to ake tha chapters longer. make the story go a bit slower comparatively. Any way, I just want you to know how much I appreciate you giving me advice! :)
Lov, Lornie
8/11/2002 c1 Karen
Nice story so far. Lacks character development.
Nice story so far. Lacks character development.
8/7/2002 c1 Lornyl Mahtsae
hey, I never realized that part in Zargon and Katelyn was like Gladiator, I never saw that movie. haha, thanx for reviewing my story by the way, I really appreciate reviews, but then, most pple do, right? I like the story so far! It's very original, too. I like Faytan and Luciem. They're funny. On to the next chapter! :)
hey, I never realized that part in Zargon and Katelyn was like Gladiator, I never saw that movie. haha, thanx for reviewing my story by the way, I really appreciate reviews, but then, most pple do, right? I like the story so far! It's very original, too. I like Faytan and Luciem. They're funny. On to the next chapter! :)
8/2/2002 c1 abcdefghijklk mnopqrstuvwxyz
Seems pretty good so far. I shall continue reading this. Feel free to read and review any of mine.
Seems pretty good so far. I shall continue reading this. Feel free to read and review any of mine.