for Legend of Ardan6/4/2004 c3 
10Grey Falcon
I like the way the story flows - smooth. And the character Vincent is pretty much well defined, at least to my taste.
When will you post more of this?
10Grey FalconI like the way the story flows - smooth. And the character Vincent is pretty much well defined, at least to my taste.
When will you post more of this?
1/4/2004 c3 Grey-eyed-dream-chaser
Well, isn't this the typical story of a person who amounted to nearly nothing becoming a hero? LOL Good story. I like it so far. There are a few small grammar mistakes, the kinds that a spell checker wouldn't catch and a bit of a mess up with the tense but otherwise, this is good. I look forward to reading more and I hope you continue this story.
Well, isn't this the typical story of a person who amounted to nearly nothing becoming a hero? LOL Good story. I like it so far. There are a few small grammar mistakes, the kinds that a spell checker wouldn't catch and a bit of a mess up with the tense but otherwise, this is good. I look forward to reading more and I hope you continue this story.
8/11/2002 c1 3Ashley Herr
Great beginning! Love it lots! hey...uhh one ity bity prob though. You say that he isn't strong but only a paragraph or two later you say he's pretty strong. That kinda contradicts what you said at the beginning. OH! and the mist...poisonous right? hope he has antidotes or a shot that keeps him from being poisone...or is it that you become poisoned by it if you're in it a certain period of time? i love reviewing...if you want a review on sumthin...mail me or sumthin!
3Ashley HerrGreat beginning! Love it lots! hey...uhh one ity bity prob though. You say that he isn't strong but only a paragraph or two later you say he's pretty strong. That kinda contradicts what you said at the beginning. OH! and the mist...poisonous right? hope he has antidotes or a shot that keeps him from being poisone...or is it that you become poisoned by it if you're in it a certain period of time? i love reviewing...if you want a review on sumthin...mail me or sumthin!