for One Breath1/27/2012 c1 MX
Awesome! This strikes me as so amazing because you managed to give both a satisfying plot and build a background in just a simple oneshot. You characterized the brokenness perfectly, and I understand how the situation came to be. Not to mention the angst. Nice job.
Awesome! This strikes me as so amazing because you managed to give both a satisfying plot and build a background in just a simple oneshot. You characterized the brokenness perfectly, and I understand how the situation came to be. Not to mention the angst. Nice job.
9/2/2002 c1 
2Hedge1
Ooo, very good. I like your writing style a lot, and its very dark, with lots of fun emotion. Well, fun if you're not a character in the story, at least. ^.~ And it manages to make a lot of sense, even though there's obviously a bit of background to it. Sorry, I don't make a lot of sense in the middle of the night.
2Hedge1Ooo, very good. I like your writing style a lot, and its very dark, with lots of fun emotion. Well, fun if you're not a character in the story, at least. ^.~ And it manages to make a lot of sense, even though there's obviously a bit of background to it. Sorry, I don't make a lot of sense in the middle of the night.
9/2/2002 c1 1Ferox Ryter
There's a lot of emotion in this, and it is pretty dark. They've got good names too. There's clearly a whole story set before this, and it reads more like an ending that a begining.
1Ferox RyterThere's a lot of emotion in this, and it is pretty dark. They've got good names too. There's clearly a whole story set before this, and it reads more like an ending that a begining.