for How's It Gonna Be?1/27/2012 c1 MX
First off: Very, very, very, very, very, very (very, very, very...) hot. I mean, guys gotta go take a cold shower now hot. I mean, girls wanting to try it for themselves hot. Very hot.
Second off: the end, I LOVED. LOVED. It's so perfect- this beautiful girl gets what she wants and the scarred one is isolated, left alone, feeling hollow and stolen. Usually people make it the other way around, but this was so heart shatteringly true and tasteful and wow. Excellent. Excellent.
First off: Very, very, very, very, very, very (very, very, very...) hot. I mean, guys gotta go take a cold shower now hot. I mean, girls wanting to try it for themselves hot. Very hot.
Second off: the end, I LOVED. LOVED. It's so perfect- this beautiful girl gets what she wants and the scarred one is isolated, left alone, feeling hollow and stolen. Usually people make it the other way around, but this was so heart shatteringly true and tasteful and wow. Excellent. Excellent.
10/22/2002 c1 
1Jaquard
This is a wonderfully deep story.
You bring the angst and emotion clearly across the void.
Well done!
1JaquardThis is a wonderfully deep story.
You bring the angst and emotion clearly across the void.
Well done!
9/3/2002 c1 fatalgambler
Nice Original Story ^_^
FF.net is ALSO a place for originals, don't worry...
why did you take out this story from your list? and I have just found it and hooked onto it...
is there anyway I could pursuade you get continue on it?
The introduction of the first person's mind set was a bit confusing, hmm, not confusing, more like, not too solid.. besides anxious - and the wanting and not wanting to meet doesn't show too well - because the only noticeable remark was "hated body" until those two undress... don't know.. it might be cool if he saw something resembles his own shame before he met her, or something similar - like the old man or even a pet in the future, what do you think?
I am glad you didn't make it TOO sensual =P even for the R rating, I must say, it is quite good, because, it does tell me what they are thinking and perhaps feeling too ^_^
(i think one of the reason why you don't see reviews is because you don't let anonymous people review - I like your story as much as to just register for FF net right now - I used to anonymously review ^_^ more comfortable that way ^_^)
Nice Original Story ^_^
FF.net is ALSO a place for originals, don't worry...
why did you take out this story from your list? and I have just found it and hooked onto it...
is there anyway I could pursuade you get continue on it?
The introduction of the first person's mind set was a bit confusing, hmm, not confusing, more like, not too solid.. besides anxious - and the wanting and not wanting to meet doesn't show too well - because the only noticeable remark was "hated body" until those two undress... don't know.. it might be cool if he saw something resembles his own shame before he met her, or something similar - like the old man or even a pet in the future, what do you think?
I am glad you didn't make it TOO sensual =P even for the R rating, I must say, it is quite good, because, it does tell me what they are thinking and perhaps feeling too ^_^
(i think one of the reason why you don't see reviews is because you don't let anonymous people review - I like your story as much as to just register for FF net right now - I used to anonymously review ^_^ more comfortable that way ^_^)