for Amber7/26/2005 c1 
29Katterree Fengari
hm, I really like it. Interesting how you say it doesn't matter which way you read it.I like the "Weaving patterns like water" phrase...I've never been much for muses, but I do like this poem.
29Katterree Fengarihm, I really like it. Interesting how you say it doesn't matter which way you read it.I like the "Weaving patterns like water" phrase...I've never been much for muses, but I do like this poem.
12/29/2004 c1 28Kellza
very fantasy. I love the way the poem works symmetrically, either way, like a square. No matter which way you turn it, you still know what it is. You published this on the day my mom and brother died.
28Kellzavery fantasy. I love the way the poem works symmetrically, either way, like a square. No matter which way you turn it, you still know what it is. You published this on the day my mom and brother died.
11/27/2004 c1 11Earthsong12
wow this is realy cool. I like the way you can read it vertically or horizontally. I also love how descriptive it is. good job!
11Earthsong12wow this is realy cool. I like the way you can read it vertically or horizontally. I also love how descriptive it is. good job!
2/5/2004 c1 83Nails For Your Crucifix
OMG I love this. I especially love that it works both way. Although, I do prefer the 2 columns and the message that goes that way. But across is good too. There's just something about it that's so striking. Beautiful work. It's now one of my favorites *clickity*
83Nails For Your CrucifixOMG I love this. I especially love that it works both way. Although, I do prefer the 2 columns and the message that goes that way. But across is good too. There's just something about it that's so striking. Beautiful work. It's now one of my favorites *clickity*
9/19/2003 c1 8Sour straw Roxors
Your muse should be proud ^_^ This had some great imagery, I read it both ways you suggested and I like how either way it fits..lovely
8Sour straw RoxorsYour muse should be proud ^_^ This had some great imagery, I read it both ways you suggested and I like how either way it fits..lovely
4/6/2003 c1 7Snowlily
Wow. I haven't read any of your poetry in SO long, and I can honestly say that I really missed it. I love this. You just have so much talent. It's wonderful. :)
7SnowlilyWow. I haven't read any of your poetry in SO long, and I can honestly say that I really missed it. I love this. You just have so much talent. It's wonderful. :)
3/3/2003 c1 49Taylor Marin
Wow, this is beautiful. Unfortunately, I can't hold to being able to read poetry well, so much of your intent has probably been lost on my reading it. :-( Sorry. It *is* beautiful, nonetheless; very ethereal and mystical. Good job!
I'm kinda actually reviewing to say thank you so much for reviewing my poem! I wanted to e-mail you, but you didn't have you addy up, so, yes. Your review totally made my day- it was very well thought out and you are clearly gifted in being able to analyze things well.
(The reason I found your review so encouraging is that you caught on to the extended metaphor I had tried to make it. No one else had caught that and I was afraid I'd gone and been stupid again with my writing. Wouldn't be the first time.)
Well, if you'd like to e-mail me back, I'd love any advice you could give on my writing- you seem to have a lot more talent than I do! I have to leave the house at nine and will be driving all day (I'm actually on vacation right now, heading home) so I can't review any more of your writing right now, but I promise to get to it later.
Again, thanks so much and wonderful job! God bless,
~Taylor
49Taylor MarinWow, this is beautiful. Unfortunately, I can't hold to being able to read poetry well, so much of your intent has probably been lost on my reading it. :-( Sorry. It *is* beautiful, nonetheless; very ethereal and mystical. Good job!
I'm kinda actually reviewing to say thank you so much for reviewing my poem! I wanted to e-mail you, but you didn't have you addy up, so, yes. Your review totally made my day- it was very well thought out and you are clearly gifted in being able to analyze things well.
(The reason I found your review so encouraging is that you caught on to the extended metaphor I had tried to make it. No one else had caught that and I was afraid I'd gone and been stupid again with my writing. Wouldn't be the first time.)
Well, if you'd like to e-mail me back, I'd love any advice you could give on my writing- you seem to have a lot more talent than I do! I have to leave the house at nine and will be driving all day (I'm actually on vacation right now, heading home) so I can't review any more of your writing right now, but I promise to get to it later.
Again, thanks so much and wonderful job! God bless,
~Taylor
12/16/2002 c1 90SweetGrape
Great descriptive piece. Nice imagery and metaphor- 'black mist curls'
'Beautiful/ Terrible/ Hypnotic' says so much so quickly. Mysterious and enticing, but also something to fear.
'Consuming my world in amber' very strong, intense image.
And the other half, darker, rougher and colder. Less entrancing and more vibrant- 'preparing to take flight/ Across distant corners of my mind', though it ends with the same atmosphere as the first half.
And together! A bit choppy when put together- seems to rush to the end as the lines flow into each other. Although it does work well with the one-worders coupled with explanatory/ elaborating descriptions.
90SweetGrapeGreat descriptive piece. Nice imagery and metaphor- 'black mist curls'
'Beautiful/ Terrible/ Hypnotic' says so much so quickly. Mysterious and enticing, but also something to fear.
'Consuming my world in amber' very strong, intense image.
And the other half, darker, rougher and colder. Less entrancing and more vibrant- 'preparing to take flight/ Across distant corners of my mind', though it ends with the same atmosphere as the first half.
And together! A bit choppy when put together- seems to rush to the end as the lines flow into each other. Although it does work well with the one-worders coupled with explanatory/ elaborating descriptions.
11/21/2002 c1 43Carter Tachikawa
Very nice. I like it a lot. Keep writing. And thanks for the review.~CT
43Carter TachikawaVery nice. I like it a lot. Keep writing. And thanks for the review.~CT
11/9/2002 c1 40AvaRicE
I love the way you've used such descriptive words... I get the feeling that everyone who reads this gets a different creature pictured in their mind, but a beautiful one nonetheless.
Keep writing :)
40AvaRicEI love the way you've used such descriptive words... I get the feeling that everyone who reads this gets a different creature pictured in their mind, but a beautiful one nonetheless.
Keep writing :)
11/4/2002 c1 12Terra Tigra
What a cool idea! hehe. Very, very nice. It creates a very strong image in my mind.
Pan: How come you never wrote a poem about me?
Tigra: Um... I dunno, maybe because you are boring and mean!
Pan: I am not!
Tigra: Yes you are! All you ever do is get on my back for not posting and telling me how I could do better!
Pan: Well, if I don't then who will!
Tigra: (crosses her arms and pouts) You could be a little nicer though...
Pan: *sigh* alright, alright...
Tigra: Um... sorry bout that ^.^" didn't mean to argue in my review. Muses, what can ya do? Thumbs! I really like this poem! hehe
And I'm sure Pan likes it too!
Arrivederci!
-Terra Tigra- & -Pantera-
12Terra TigraWhat a cool idea! hehe. Very, very nice. It creates a very strong image in my mind.
Pan: How come you never wrote a poem about me?
Tigra: Um... I dunno, maybe because you are boring and mean!
Pan: I am not!
Tigra: Yes you are! All you ever do is get on my back for not posting and telling me how I could do better!
Pan: Well, if I don't then who will!
Tigra: (crosses her arms and pouts) You could be a little nicer though...
Pan: *sigh* alright, alright...
Tigra: Um... sorry bout that ^.^" didn't mean to argue in my review. Muses, what can ya do? Thumbs! I really like this poem! hehe
And I'm sure Pan likes it too!
Arrivederci!
-Terra Tigra- & -Pantera-