for Following in Your Footsteps7/28/2003 c1 
3Subliminal Ambulence
Yes...this is so awesome, not to mention hilarious. Nope, sorry, can't relate. No guy would DREAM of going NEAR me. But I love the story...write more, Kari-chan
3Subliminal AmbulenceYes...this is so awesome, not to mention hilarious. Nope, sorry, can't relate. No guy would DREAM of going NEAR me. But I love the story...write more, Kari-chan
9/20/2002 c1 Liller
Wow. Three paragraphs in and i see the style, the smoothness and bitterness and coolness and sarcasm and cynicalness is so good and so not the way you talk, but it seems effortless. it seems like an old-fashioned private eye movie that way, the way the words kind of slid out of your mouth from beneath the brim of a hat pulled low over shadowy eyes and a trenchcoat. this is AWESOME.
Second entry: the style is subtler in this entry; i liked it when it was so apparent, which is not to say i don't like this. this guy is a fast worker. is he the same age as our main character? it's kind of hard to believe anyone would harass someone at 11 in a DQ. write more, embellish, i love the plot!
Wow. Three paragraphs in and i see the style, the smoothness and bitterness and coolness and sarcasm and cynicalness is so good and so not the way you talk, but it seems effortless. it seems like an old-fashioned private eye movie that way, the way the words kind of slid out of your mouth from beneath the brim of a hat pulled low over shadowy eyes and a trenchcoat. this is AWESOME.
Second entry: the style is subtler in this entry; i liked it when it was so apparent, which is not to say i don't like this. this guy is a fast worker. is he the same age as our main character? it's kind of hard to believe anyone would harass someone at 11 in a DQ. write more, embellish, i love the plot!
9/10/2002 c1 Topher
Sarcasm, gotta love it. Add a little bit of humor, and you've got a recipe for a very awesome story. Yours is definitely heading down that road. And I have to agree with the main character on this, that guy is a moron. No wait, that's an insult to morons' intelligence... he's dumb, let's just leave it at that, before I call him something worse. Great narrative, actually feels like I'm reading someone's journal/diary. Good work.
Sarcasm, gotta love it. Add a little bit of humor, and you've got a recipe for a very awesome story. Yours is definitely heading down that road. And I have to agree with the main character on this, that guy is a moron. No wait, that's an insult to morons' intelligence... he's dumb, let's just leave it at that, before I call him something worse. Great narrative, actually feels like I'm reading someone's journal/diary. Good work.