for Crickets10/10/2002 c1 
32RiddleSolved
wow, another great poem of yours! :)
dramatic and yet happy and nice. coll about the crickets. A littlebit confusef about what's really the theme, and yet that makes it more original... ~*dragonhope*~ thanx 4 putting me on your fav.list:)
32RiddleSolvedwow, another great poem of yours! :)
dramatic and yet happy and nice. coll about the crickets. A littlebit confusef about what's really the theme, and yet that makes it more original... ~*dragonhope*~ thanx 4 putting me on your fav.list:)
10/4/2002 c1 tk-lova
heyz...this was a really good poem...seriuosly...however you spell that!...hehehe yes, i see talent, i do i do...luv ya!
~tabs`
heyz...this was a really good poem...seriuosly...however you spell that!...hehehe yes, i see talent, i do i do...luv ya!
~tabs`
9/26/2002 c1 Needa S
Good poem and thanks for the review. You are right I tend to get carried away in my words. It's a hard thing to break. Keep writing.
Good poem and thanks for the review. You are right I tend to get carried away in my words. It's a hard thing to break. Keep writing.
9/17/2002 c1 12FattyButt
That is very good poem. I like it very much. You do have some talent. Check out my work! :)
12FattyButtThat is very good poem. I like it very much. You do have some talent. Check out my work! :)
9/17/2002 c1 7Khalida
Good... not as forced in your ryhming as before. But it seemed that the ryhming dropped off at one point and didn't come back to the end. If you were going for that, it's fine the way it is. But if you were wanting to keep the ryhme and rythym, then try to hold the ryhme firm.
On your line "The grass look of crystals": Are you saying, the grass lookS of crystals? Watch out for that a bit, although I'm not one to talk when it comes to typos, etc. Anyway, great poem. I like the imagery. Keep it up.
~Khali~
7KhalidaGood... not as forced in your ryhming as before. But it seemed that the ryhming dropped off at one point and didn't come back to the end. If you were going for that, it's fine the way it is. But if you were wanting to keep the ryhme and rythym, then try to hold the ryhme firm.
On your line "The grass look of crystals": Are you saying, the grass lookS of crystals? Watch out for that a bit, although I'm not one to talk when it comes to typos, etc. Anyway, great poem. I like the imagery. Keep it up.
~Khali~
9/15/2002 c1 Wasting Time
Nice descritions. It's not as forced as the other poem I read, and this is really good. Great job!
-Jessie
Nice descritions. It's not as forced as the other poem I read, and this is really good. Great job!
-Jessie