for Frozen Love12/28/2004 c1 
27Krys
This is lovely. There were a few, very tiny mistakes, but they were already mentioned. As I said, this is wonderful. Only, the image you created was so cold and desolate and a wedding should be so happy, chaotic maybe, but cheerful.
I've written a few similar things, but never published them. Perhaps I will after reading this.
'No matter how hard the wicked wind tried not a strand moved and never could it rustle her white skirts.' This is my favorite part, and after reading a few more lines I went back to reread it and that's when I figured it out.
Again, very nicly done. Great description, and just an all around good idea...
~Krys
27KrysThis is lovely. There were a few, very tiny mistakes, but they were already mentioned. As I said, this is wonderful. Only, the image you created was so cold and desolate and a wedding should be so happy, chaotic maybe, but cheerful.
I've written a few similar things, but never published them. Perhaps I will after reading this.
'No matter how hard the wicked wind tried not a strand moved and never could it rustle her white skirts.' This is my favorite part, and after reading a few more lines I went back to reread it and that's when I figured it out.
Again, very nicly done. Great description, and just an all around good idea...
~Krys
3/1/2004 c1 2moonlightmelody
Your flow in the sense of writing and the poise in the style of the story moves quite splendidly. I enjoyed it. It gave a mysterious picture in my mind and the ending fits into it nicely. Well done! ^_^
2moonlightmelodyYour flow in the sense of writing and the poise in the style of the story moves quite splendidly. I enjoyed it. It gave a mysterious picture in my mind and the ending fits into it nicely. Well done! ^_^
1/6/2004 c1 18Val Mora
I needed the note to figure out what it was. . . I thought it was a sort of fairy-tale thing, where they need someone to wake them up, or it's about breaking precious things. Hmm. Tells you how observant I am. ^^;
18Val MoraI needed the note to figure out what it was. . . I thought it was a sort of fairy-tale thing, where they need someone to wake them up, or it's about breaking precious things. Hmm. Tells you how observant I am. ^^;
11/10/2003 c1 13saintchris
Thanks for your reviews.
This tale is a little similar to mine, with not exactly a twist at the end, but a surprising 'reveal' of why the character are frozen (as it says in your title).
I quite enjoyed it.
Though I did think that it was going to be more of a sci-fi/fantasy/fairy tale type piece where the frozen characters had been frozen for a reason (by a wicked witch or a potion or laser or something).
13saintchrisThanks for your reviews.
This tale is a little similar to mine, with not exactly a twist at the end, but a surprising 'reveal' of why the character are frozen (as it says in your title).
I quite enjoyed it.
Though I did think that it was going to be more of a sci-fi/fantasy/fairy tale type piece where the frozen characters had been frozen for a reason (by a wicked witch or a potion or laser or something).
5/3/2003 c1 54Werecat99
That was very sweet, in every sense of the word. Very original and refreshing, in a way.
Good work.
54Werecat99That was very sweet, in every sense of the word. Very original and refreshing, in a way.
Good work.
3/12/2003 c1 13theblindman
.his hand only touched her smooth left hand. The flowers, her right hand.
To many hands. Find a synonym, or divide up the digital description so that they're not all clumped together.
.coming to a rest one a silver surface.
Didn't you make the same correction on one of mine? lol
Overall, I give it three and a half stars of David. Not sure why, I just like 'em. Keep up the good work :)
tbm
13theblindman.his hand only touched her smooth left hand. The flowers, her right hand.
To many hands. Find a synonym, or divide up the digital description so that they're not all clumped together.
.coming to a rest one a silver surface.
Didn't you make the same correction on one of mine? lol
Overall, I give it three and a half stars of David. Not sure why, I just like 'em. Keep up the good work :)
tbm
2/20/2003 c1 6Strider Hunter
Once upon a time, way back in my high school english class, I would have picked up on those subtle little clues and figure it out before the last sentence.
But now, dag-nabbit, I needed your author's note to see! AArgh! Talk about my skills getting rusty.
Anyway, cool little piece, Dee.your short stories never cease to impress me.
6Strider HunterOnce upon a time, way back in my high school english class, I would have picked up on those subtle little clues and figure it out before the last sentence.
But now, dag-nabbit, I needed your author's note to see! AArgh! Talk about my skills getting rusty.
Anyway, cool little piece, Dee.your short stories never cease to impress me.
9/26/2002 c1 freak overboard
the way you wrote it at first made the scene seem cold and hostile, and the ending made me laugh because i thought it was something serious.
anywayz, good job. i like it. XD
the way you wrote it at first made the scene seem cold and hostile, and the ending made me laugh because i thought it was something serious.
anywayz, good job. i like it. XD
9/26/2002 c1 7Roxy2
oh this is good! very origional (sorry can't spell!) this is really well writen and sooo clever!
7Roxy2oh this is good! very origional (sorry can't spell!) this is really well writen and sooo clever!
9/26/2002 c1 47Skivverus
Thought it might be a picture for a little while - turns out it was, I suppose, but more than that.
Anyway. This could use some tinkering with the adjectives, because there's a sense of wonder here dying to get out, and it's not quite getting there. Good start though.
Now, let's see what else there is...
47SkivverusThought it might be a picture for a little while - turns out it was, I suppose, but more than that.
Anyway. This could use some tinkering with the adjectives, because there's a sense of wonder here dying to get out, and it's not quite getting there. Good start though.
Now, let's see what else there is...