A/N: My first posted piece of poetry! (Though by no means my fist poem) I'd love feedback on this piece, as I'm suddenly having second thoughts about posting it at all. If you'd liked it, please tell me – I really need a confidence booster right now. Having said that, if you think I shouldn't' have bothered posting it, I'd like to know too, maybe I can revise it?
This has a slightly jerky rhythm, and should be read with longer breaks at the end of each line than anywhere else (including full stops.) The title, first and last lines were mine, I had forgotten they are also part of a Meatloaf song. Does that make them mine? If not, sorry! Also, 'Outa' should be 'out of' but that's how I want it to be read/said.
Applogies for the spacing - it is in stanzas, but the computer hates me, I think.
Two outa three ain't bad
Two outa three ain't bad
He said. She smiled and replied
That three outa three is better but four
Is worth having.
He laughed and tears filled her eyes at the thought that
This may all end
At the thought that it may all end.
But, she argued, I liked Shakespeare better.
He smiled and replied 'You win.'
And that was all there was to say
On the matter of who was better
Outa Shakespeare and his later
Friend. That was all there was to say
All there was to say.
He rolled on top of her. She squealed
Obligingly. He laughed, contented and
She panted, exhausted,
Obliging.
He smiled, she laughed and they
Realised that their roles had been
Reversed, and that there was
Nothing more to say
To each other.
Nothing more to say.
He smiled, she laughed and they
Realised that though their roles
Had been reversed
It must all end anyway.
It must all end, this way.
He smiled, she laughed,
And though the smile
Was a little terse and
The laugh a little forced,
They played their roles to the last.
And then it was
Goodbye
And there was nothing more to say
Nothing more to say.
And they parted for forever and a day.
But for every one of them
There are two of us
Happy and contented, obliging,
But contented.
And never to be parted
Together for forever and a day.
Two outa three ain't bad,
They say.
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