7WHY MOPE?
Whenever he's with her,
I can't help but envy;
This pain I can't bear,
Makes my heart feel so heavy;
But I realized I shan't care,
Thus fix my life that's messy;
Maybe Mr. Right has not come yet,
But sooner or later, he'll arrive I bet.
A/N: Gosh, an Ottava Rima! Yeah, that's what this poem is called with the rhyming thing of a-b-a-b-a-b-c-c…I think the measure should be iambic pentameter(I'm not sure) but I'm afraid I haven't followed that. Pls. give me your piece of mind! And look at the sixth line, I want another word for "wavy"…maybe messy is fine, but wavy is nicer. I dunno, I just feel like wavy is fine. But if u have another two-syllable adjective there which sounds and means something like wavy or messy, then say so! Please… (yeah i know...this poem is short...maybe way too short to judge, but pls., pls., pls...review.)
REVIEWS ARE SO, SO HIGHLY APPRECIATED!
Please…
(Jan 04,2009):Oh, thanks to TheBestDay. That's it. I'm going for messy.