Fallen Angels – Review

Hi guys. First of all, I'd like to point out, this is the main announcement "The second book will be named Black Wings ", ok, you're done, that's the MAIN announcement, so you can just skip to the bottom because there's nothing else in this that's important. I admit, this chapter, or "chapter" is all for publicity, and so I can get reviews (I admit it...), but you know, I needed an extra chapter for the review replies, AND so I can have advertisements. Well, the second book (which is going to be shorter by the way) is going to be titled "Black Wings", and is going to be released this Saturday (these really do sound like advertisements...)

Well first, lemme start with the review replies...

Cindy Moon – Haha, I'm glad that you actually read Forever Blue. At first, I thought you'd just... skip over it since it definitely isn't your type of fic, but strangely enough, you enjoyed reading it. Afterall, it IS rated G, suitable for all audiences -_-. Lol, all the people that first read Forever Blue and that are going to read Black Wings... they're really gonna be in for a shock -_-(You're probably the only reader that didn't cry after reading that chapter). Well, I'm really looking forward to read more of your works. *_* they make me feel so inferior... Makes me feel like I'm just wasting time, writing all these pointless chapters... for example what I'm doing right now, but I won't get into that ^_^.

Julia-Tears – WOW, I was so shocked when I read your review. I was reading it, and I was just thinking "WOAH". At first, I thought NO ONE would cry... I thought people would just be "Aww... that was so sad... stupid Trenton," and u know, move on, but _ I Was wrong... I know this doesn't really help, but when I read that you cried, a huge smile just grew across my face. Lol, I feel awful saying this, but it's such a huge compliment to know that someone actually CRIED while reading your fic. And also the other compliments, they really keep me going. I literally rewrote that part when Hikari died about 10 times... *sniff sniff* made me sad just revising it. And TRENTON, geez everyone hates him now... but I don't blame them... even I hate him. He should die. And also, (forgot to mention), I actually have had considered different songs to play. I've had a different song for every chapter, but I felt that the readers would be all tired of everything, downloading songs every chapter... Idunno, I may put more song recommendations in my future chapters.

Azndreamer1788 – EHEH. Sorry. I know that Trenton was one of ur favorite characters, but I don't think he is very much right now lol (lol's not appropriate right now is it...) Well, I won't spoil anything, but Trenton becomes a completely different person in the second book, but that's all I'm going to say.

Smitha-r – Lol, you're the only one that commented about Reia. No one else cared about Reia's death -_-. Well, I hope that you'll read Black Wings, and I'm glad u enjoyed reading this fic.

Kerochan – wow, you reviewed every chapter up till now _ . That just gave my review counter a +28 lol. Well, I have to admit, this is the goriest thing I've ever written in my life, and not to mention, the most angst, and the most SICKLY. Well, not to disappoint you or anything, but I'm probably not going to have a published version of this book. I don't think any publishers would enjoy it anyway -_-, and there are a lot of things I hate about this fic _ . Well, it was my first real fic, so I still have a lot to learn, and hopefully, I'll keep learning (being someone that never reads, I think I've improved a lot). And by the way, I'd love to read you fics, I'm kind of curious to see how your writing style is.

Joseph – As a matter of fact, I can draw, and I have an entire sketchbook filled with Fallen Angels atwork (30 pages). I'll e-mail you some stuff if you're interested. And about becoming a mangaka _ I'll pass on that... after drawing a manga for my friend's birthday, I think I've retired lol.

Aznistic-sub1 – I don't know whether to decide if that review was a good thing or a bad thing... eheh. Gosh, I'm so blunt, but ur used to it, so u could care less.

Aznistic-sub2 – Yay, another review. Wow, "this is the best angel-involved fic on ", awww, hits me right down here... *puts hand over heart*. But then again, how many angel fics have u read on ... (yes, the glass IS half empty). U know... lol, I TOLD you and spoiled everything about the ending to you, and I seriously thought you'd just be "Aww, sad... stupid Trenton, he needs to die. *lights him on fire*" and etc, but wow... I guess Track 05 REALLY enhanced it. Lol, just knowing that u cried made my entire day, although I felt really bad because after you read my last chapter, your day went 180, so I just felt completely horrible... but yea. Well, I don't know what to say... I mean how can you say that your writing has deteriorated? (throws a fit), you're writing's so GOOD, much better than mine. But thanks for noticing. Yea, NOT to be conceited, but I do think my writing has improved. I'm a lot more comfortable with writing now, considering how I haven't read a book that's outside required reading besides Ender's Game, and I'm STILL not finished -_-.

A/N: Well, now that I'm done with the review replies, I just have a few words to say about the fic. IF this fic were to be published, WHICH it's probably not going to, these are my reasons why I wouldn't publish it.

What I liked – Well, I liked my clinches... my pride and joy lol. And the SONG, if you remember a wihle back... chapter 5 was it? I don't remember, but the song, that's my other pride and joy. I haven't written poetry in so long I think I got rusty... *thinks* is there anything else I liked... nnnnot really... ok onto the "what I didn't like".

What I disliked – A lot of things... what should I start out with first... ok character development. This story has a HUGE lack of character development. One of the main reasons why I wrote Forever Blue was so I could exercise my character development skills and so I could get more familiar with it, or become more natural with it. SO many of my characters are dry. If you read the first few chapters of thef ic, Mayuko is depicted as a very fun-loving, hyper character, but later, she magically morphs into a sweet, naïve, and then even LATER, she's a strong character who I remember first asked Trenton why humans desire revenge because she didn'dt understand it -_-. That's just ONE other thing, the other thing is Roen... he's the FLATTEST character... and he's my main character T_T. There's just nothing to say about him cuz he has absolutely no character... He and Dustin are also generally the same people, although Dustin has a little bit more character than he does. And I was thinking, if they both like Ara, and Ara's supposed to choose between them, why would she have a hard time if their personalities were exactly the same... My strongest characters were Kelly and Hikari, but *sniff sniff* u know... Now, my strongest character is Kelly, who is only going to be in about 3 or 4 chapters -_-. *sigh* one of my hopes is that Forever Blue really helped me (which it has) in my character development so I can have better character development in Black Wings. Another thing I didn't like (u really don't have to read this unless you're extremely bored), is the STORYLINE. It's so DRY... nothing ever really happens... has anyone noticed that the first two battles between Umbra and Etheria could have been completely removed from the story, and there would be no effect... I even forgot about Mayuko's broken arm once -_-. In the chapter after she broke it, I wrote about her completely fine, thanks to Julia-Tears for pointing it out T_T (lol, I'm reviewing all my flaws, I wonder if u'll still read it now). *sigh* and also, I had short-lasting after-effects. After Mayuko's sisters were hospitalized and her parents were murdered, she was sad for the next chapter, but after that, SHE WAS FINE -_-. And Roen... geez, Roen had so many issues... after fighting with Trenton, there were NO after-effects... he just went on with life... *sigh* in The Fantasy, my main character Brian had NO character development, but that was because he was just the good half of another person, having his bad half being the villain, so I had an excuse, but Roen... he's just a normal person (Yea, sorry guys, if you thought he was something special, he's not). HOPEFULLY In Black Wings, I can give him more character... ok... wow, my rantings about this fic might go on for an entire page if I don't stop now... so I'll stop now...

A/N: U know, I just read soemtihng that my friend said, "I know you guys don't like reading long A/Ns so I"ll make this shorter" *looks around cautiously*. I stated in the very beginning of the chapter that you DIDN'T have to read this, so yea, it's not my fault if ur all pissed off now since there was nothing that happened. WELL, the main message... Black Wings... coming out Saturday... I hope you'll all read it... ok, bye.